Wednesday, 10 September 2014

Fairy Tale Persuasive Writing

WALT: persuade



 

Why the red queen should lose her head

I believe that the Red queen should have her head chopped off because everybody in the land of Wonderland agrees that they have heard enough of her saying “off with your head”. She has also been killing innocent families and she has only been accepting people as friends with enormously big bellies, big ears and long noses like Pinocchio. Do you really think you can trust this murderer?
 She has been hurting animals scientists say that 99/100 animals would be petrified to stay in the palace with her. The SPCA would be horrified to hear what she has been doing to the poor animals for example she uses pigs as foot stalls, the flamingo as a golf stick,  hedgehogs as a petonque ball and frogs as butlers.
 She has been killing an enormous amount of animals. I bet that in a couple of years she would have killed everyone even the King of Hearts. So think about living somewhere else because your children could be next on the list.
 So would you like to accept her to have her head chopped off? Because she has been N.o 1 criminal for 20 years now. So I wouldn’t like to be her. Do you agree?
By Naomi
 
Dear police,



Cinderella should be punished because she lost an old magic glass artefact and went to the ball without our permission.
Do you want all the ancient, magic glass artefacts to be lost? Everybody agrees that Cinderella would go for the other special items next, not only the glass shoe which she has already stolen. This makes all sensible people feel worried that it won`t be long till she strikes again.

We both think that Cinderella going to the ball without our permission is unsuitable. As much as she is a scoundrel we are in charge of her and therefore must say that this is worrying. How would you feel if your younger stepsister went somewhere without your knowing?
This proves that Cinderella is a worrying, dangerous girl and unsafe to all other people.

From The Ugly Step Sisters


By Eve
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Dear Police

I think Cinderella’s step sisters should be arrested because they don’t care for anyone but themselves, also they are ugly, rude and disrespectful to poor Cinderella.
They should care for Cinderella because she does so many things for those disrespectful girls who not only changed Cinderella’s name from Ella to Cinderella, they don’t think about poor Cinderella doing nothing at home except for crying about not being allowed to go to the ball. And after all she had done for those step sisters of hers!
They all wore pretty clothes but oh no, not Cinderella! Although the two horrid step sisters look ok they are truly ugly as you can get!  This young lady has to wear ragged ugly clothes that stink and look like ashes. Cinderella deserves more than torn, ashy dark cloths because she is a very hard working girl who on the outside looks ugly and torn although on the inside she is the prettiest of the prettiest and no one can change that.
Poor Cinderella having to live with those rude, spoilt girls who don’t deserve to have such a good slave for such rude lady’s and they could perfectly fine on their own. And not to mention their mother, well I do recommend that they and their mother better clean up there rudeness or I bet something bad will happen to them such as getting a complaint for drinking all the punch at the ball along with all the pretzels. So I’m just saying they’d better watch out or they will get pay back!
So now I’m just saying If you are one of these ladies don’t run, don’t hide.
They're coming for you.                          
   By Halle
 

 
 
 

9 comments:

  1. i like you're story it is awsome to read

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  2. Wow Halle, you're story sounds interesting and great explaning why thay should go to jail because if i was the police they'd be caught in an instant!

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  3. WOW Eve, your perswaysive peace sounds interesting and it is very intreging as well as fun at the same time! I also think that you defintly need to write more perswaysive peaces soon.

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  4. OMG Halle that was some amazing describing I think you should remember to add in some questions and check that it makes sense and then it would be 10/10 but otherwise it was amazing describing and I can't wait for your next piece of writing.

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  5. Hi Eve
    that was really good and amazing and I like how you explained about her and the glass artefact but I think you could add in some more describing

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  6. OMG-O-S-H!! Once I started reading these I could not stop. I couldn't do better.

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  7. Halle I loved your writing. I think you could add some more detail. I like how descriptive it was.
    Greer

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  8. Wow Naomi! That was great. I wish i could write like that

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  9. Awesome work! Keep up the great writing!

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