Fairy Tale Persuasive Writing

WALT: persuade

 

Why the red queen should lose her head

I believe that the Red queen should have her head chopped off because everybody in the land of Wonderland agrees that they have heard enough of her saying “off with your head”. She has also been killing innocent families and she has only been accepting people as friends with enormously big bellies, big ears and long noses like Pinocchio. Do you really think you can trust this murderer?

 She has been hurting animals scientists say that 99/100 animals would be petrified to stay in the palace with her. The SPCA would be horrified to hear what she has been doing to the poor animals for example she uses pigs as foot stalls, the flamingo as a golf stick,  hedgehogs as a petonque ball and frogs as butlers.

 She has been killing an enormous amount of animals. I bet that in a couple of years she would have killed everyone even the King of Hearts. So think about living somewhere else because your children could be next on the list.

 So would you like to accept her to have her head chopped off? Because she has been N.o 1 criminal for 20 years now. So I wouldn’t like to be her. Do you agree?

By Naomi

 

Dear police,

Cinderella should be punished because she lost an old magic glass artefact and went to the ball without our permission.

Do you want all the ancient, magic glass artefacts to be lost? Everybody agrees that Cinderella would go for the other special items next, not only the glass shoe which she has already stolen. This makes all sensible people feel worried that it won`t be long till she strikes again.

We both think that Cinderella going to the ball without our permission is unsuitable. As much as she is a scoundrel we are in charge of her and therefore must say that this is worrying. How would you feel if your younger stepsister went somewhere without your knowing?

This proves that Cinderella is a worrying, dangerous girl and unsafe to all other people.

From The Ugly Step Sisters


By Eve

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Dear Police

I think Cinderella’s step sisters should be arrested because they don’t care for anyone but themselves, also they are ugly, rude and disrespectful to poor Cinderella.

They should care for Cinderella because she does so many things for those disrespectful girls who not only changed Cinderella’s name from Ella to Cinderella, they don’t think about poor Cinderella doing nothing at home except for crying about not being allowed to go to the ball. And after all she had done for those step sisters of hers!

They all wore pretty clothes but oh no, not Cinderella! Although the two horrid step sisters look ok they are truly ugly as you can get!  This young lady has to wear ragged ugly clothes that stink and look like ashes. Cinderella deserves more than torn, ashy dark cloths because she is a very hard working girl who on the outside looks ugly and torn although on the inside she is the prettiest of the prettiest and no one can change that.

Poor Cinderella having to live with those rude, spoilt girls who don’t deserve to have such a good slave for such rude lady’s and they could perfectly fine on their own. And not to mention their mother, well I do recommend that they and their mother better clean up there rudeness or I bet something bad will happen to them such as getting a complaint for drinking all the punch at the ball along with all the pretzels. So I’m just saying they’d better watch out or they will get pay back!

So now I’m just saying If you are one of these ladies don’t run, don’t hide.

They're coming for you.                          

   By Halle

 

 

 

 

My Hot Air Baloon Journey

We did some creative writing based on our steam punk artwork.

  My hot balloon air balloon lowered me down to the ground and the clouds got farer and farer away. The sea gulls left their perches on the edge of my basket. I landed and the balloon tapped down with a little thud. I could smell the fresh sea air against my freckled and sunburnt cheeks.

Then I saw a rock move and realised it was a seal. How could I have been so silly? Then I realised it was about to attack. “Thank you deadly animal book” I said in my head. So I jumped into my balloon and floated off.

I travelled for another week or so; I can’t really remember because I had no calendar. Then I saw it. The tower I had been looking for “The Eiffel tower!” I was so excited but then the Eiffel tower disappeared. I looked for it all around me. Then I looked down and everybody was looking at me which I found very embarrassing.

Then they got a crane and lowered me down to the ground. When I got to the ground the police asked me my story and every day after that you would find me telling the wonderful story.

By Zara                 

The breezy balloons

A long time ago when we had no colour apart from gold, bronze and copper there were 5 hot air balloons. All the clocks were faded away and those too were a rusty gold and copper. As the hot air balloons passed, the clocks, which were so out of order, would be ticking. The air would not be a wonderful blue and white like in our days though. It would be a copper sky.

These balloons never would stop going through the breeze on their journey across the world. In these days the only colours there were, were copper, gold, bronze and the tiniest bit of black. The air balloons were not as fashionable as ours but they worked way better. Whenever they landed they would just catch a hard drift and there they were, off again in the solid copper air. Whenever the clock stopped ticking it would have meant that the wind was going hard and taking the clocks somewhere else but all that happened is they would just come right back. That is the air balloons from the past.

By Suzie Pinder  

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There was once a beautiful French woman who set off to start a new life so she went into a delicate hot air balloon to find her true love. She was warmly dressed in a thick fur coat and a long blue dress. She drifted up into the clouds and flew over the Eiffel Tower.

The hot air balloon was so delicate when the pigeon sat on it the balloon ripped apart. She was falling down into the Eiffel Tower. She thought she was going to die but she was caught in the arms of a luxurious 23 year old male. Her eyes fell in love with him and they happily lived ever after. 

By Naomi

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A guy invents a hot air balloon with shiny gold, metal, screwdrivers and much other technology things. Then he finished it was enormous and fascinating. It was looking a bit of an old style it was rusty and old, it looked like it was an old trinket in the ancient years. It looks incredibility rare. It was shiny like sparkly gold under the dark, old mysterious mountain and the beautiful fabric was black and pink poker dotted. It looked like there were millions of dots like rainbow sprinkles on vanilla ice cream.

Teisha Lousiale